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spectrumAU Moderator
spectrumAU Apr 18 '15


maxi


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Hi dare i ask to look at my profie havei put too much detail in ..thanking
You maxi

The Forum post is edited by spectrumAU Apr 18 '15
spectrumAU Moderator
spectrumAU Apr 18 '15
Gosh Max, reading your profile is like listening to someone who talks for ages without taking a breath.  lol


You have run things together, repeated things, omitted punctuation... sorry, but it makes it hard to read.  So, sit back and read it yourself as if you were reading about someone else.  I'm sure you'll see what I mean.

billyHill Moderator
billyHill Apr 19 '15
I gotta agree with Louise, Maxi. Punctuation and paragraphing (keeping one thought in a paragraph) go a long way in helping someone to understand another's thoughts.

we know that you know what you mean to say, but the way its written it sounds like a drunk mumbling at the bar, just before closing time IMHO. ( Only the drunk knows what they are saying). If that is what you are wanting it to sound like, you've done a great job. But how many people you attract (and what type) is going to be very questionable.

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